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Cupidís arrow fired through the haze
To awaken me from my malaise
Suddenly everything starts to make sense
The path to true love no longer dense
All Iíve been seeking in a lover clearly defined
Your beauty, your grace, everything so refined
The joy of our laughter, the ability to be free
All of these moments you give to me
So this is my token of appreciation
Joyously thankful, you may say, a celebration
The heartbreaking thing is, you canít see
How perfect a union me and you would be.

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The following comments are for "Blind Love"
by MattS

As I read the last line I can't help but think it might be better presented as:
How perfect a union you and I would be.

just a thought

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: February 20, 2011 )

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