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Wire heartís trace wire
across the state line,
Heart shaped; doubtless lines
crossed with the measure of a
nation breaking
hearts

A scorch across the wire cross
Tired and wandering, tireless
aimless; loveless

In the wiry Nevada desert



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The following comments are for "Telephone Lines"
by 0207070

great idea!
I do believe it could use a bit of stretching out .. with some more visual cues. Certainly worth the effort.

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: February 18, 2011 )





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