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spent-love cajoles
the last pastiche
from this baron land

grotty joy against
deep infernos
race

spectral-laughs flutter
germane souls
not used to breathing

blood screams
pressing the angels
last devoted call

children burgeon
from what little earth's
been gathered

resilient voices
extrude forth

gods gently grow



pablowilliams 2/14/11





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"Some people never go crazy. What truly horrible lives they must lead." Charles Bukowski


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The following comments are for "Neighbor's garden"
by pablowilliams

of editing
"pastiche"- I meant to allude to mixed materials or as a part of the growing process, infused with some sort of musicality.

"germane"- perhaps not the best word choice in trying to draw a line and elude to 'fitting' or 'useful'... 'from God', if you will.

I have never been interested in Gardening, but have always been perplexed by the whole process. I have convinced myself, that there are inner workings of God at play and I can only imagine the process- or at least try to write a poem about it. LOL

Of editing- its got to happen!

Thanks Robert!


Abel


( Posted by: pablowilliams [Member] On: February 18, 2011 )

resilient voices
The last line made me think of Paganism. Earth worshiping as it should be. To me, germane read as germinating.

Love that such a small patch of land can help one escape from the intrusive city too close to ignore.

( Posted by: toscano [Member] On: February 21, 2011 )

@fransico
Gardening certainly seems like it would offer an escape; I should give it a shot- then write about it!

Thank you for giving this a read, my friend.


Abel

( Posted by: pablowilliams [Member] On: February 27, 2011 )





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