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My head feels dizzy my stomach light
Anticipation is such a wonderful delight
I peel back the layers; seek security in your touch
I’ve never looked forward to seeing you so much

Yes, anticipation is a wonderful delight
As I see your figure appear out of sight
A puppy dog smile shines from my face
At the knowledge we’re together in the same place

Our eyes meet from across the crowded room
Dejection sets in, our time’s up so soon
Our reason for meeting over so quick
Feelings brushed aside like a cheap card trick.

But fear not for Anticipation is such a wonderful delight
Next week, you’ll still have the ability to excite
To make me feel alive at least for a while
Before I walk my fiancée up the aisle.



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The following comments are for "Crushing"
by MattS

Awwww
I'm not one to say things like "that is so sweet", but it is and if you show it to her I'm sure you will never have to build a dog house to sleep in.

BW

( Posted by: BWOz [Member] On: February 15, 2011 )

I'm with Luckie
It reads as if it could be a last minute fling or that she is going to convert into the wife. I love the fact that it is up to "us" the reader to decipher. Love the rhyme and rhythm of this poem.

Enjoyed!
Nae

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: February 16, 2011 )

Our reason for meeting
Ah, a twist ending! Loved that you capped Anticipation. Puts emphasis on what matters most.

Nice.

( Posted by: toscano [Member] On: February 17, 2011 )





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