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Origin of the Species

Darwin has a theory
but he didn’t think it through,
it simply isn’t possible
that fish made me and you.
I’ve studied every page he wrote
but I don’t understand,
why I see no breadcrumbs
on the fingers of my hand.

Genesis proclaims to all
that God created man
using his own image,
is that then what I am?
I’ve studied all that’s in his book
but I don’t understand,
why everyone’s so different
if that was what he planned.

Some people have a theory
that we came from outer space
and were colonized by aliens
to form the human race.
I’ve listened to the stories
but I don’t understand,
with nowhere left to park on earth
where did their spaceships land.

Now I have got a theory,
you can read it in my book,
for Ivor’s Ramblings tells you
if you should take a look.
Just study every page I wrote
and soon you’ll understand,
that perhaps it doesn’t matter
………if you share a poet’s hand!

Ivor G Davies


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The moment created this second, is a moment that's going to last.
It lives the full spectrum of time, the future, the present and past.
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The following comments are for "Origin of the Species"
by ivordavies

Ivor
You are looking too deep bruver

Mum and Dad were our creators

Then we took over the job

(just don't read between the lines too much or if you do don't tell anyone)

Eric xxx




Still Bleeding

In my school days as a child
the teachers were not brainy
for all their great education
they couldn’t teach me any !

But when I joined the Army
by God they knew their stuff
They got me marching round
and taught me well enough

When I first got married
the prettiest girl I’m told
Turned out to be an angel
that couldn’t save my soul

Gave me two smart kiddies
though when I stop to think
For all the Balls and Royalty
she loved the kitchen sink

She wanted something else
it would be a drastic change
Now saddled with a millionaire
that will not change her name

I would take a spinster girl
to earths heaven with a ring
She was called by God above
well deserved the real thing

life just goes full circle
don’t know the stop or start
I could do it blindfolded
guided only by my heart…..

( Posted by: Fairplay [Member] On: February 15, 2011 )

Nowhere to Park
Very well stated...and certainly makes sense to me. The 3rd stanza is very witty, given the lack of parking we are burdened with. Where did those spaceships park? A good question to ponder.

It kind of brings to my mind the 2012 thoery of the Myan calendar. For some reason all the "experts" think there is a reason the Myans stopped their calculating at the year 2012, like something weird will happen. Could be the guy who was supposed to show up that year to finish it called in sick? Maybe they just meant to add "etcetera, etcetera, etcetera".....

Very nice Mr. Ivor

BW

( Posted by: BWOz [Member] On: February 15, 2011 )

You witty man you!
Ivor,

You make me laugh, you make me smile. Honestly your poetry always flows so effortlessly. I enjoyed the topic and your ever going imagination. BUT think about it, at that point in time there was plenty of parking! Laughing...

I am still of the belief that it was our Creator no matter how he chose to do it, I mean even the aliens needed to be created!

Enjoyed!
Nae

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: February 16, 2011 )

1 corinthians 15/35--
35But someone will ask,(AX) "How are the dead raised? With what kind of body do they come?" 36You foolish person!(AY) What you sow does not come to life unless it dies. 37And what you sow is not the body that is to be, but a bare kernel, perhaps of wheat or of some other grain. 38But God gives it a body as he has chosen, and to each kind of seed its own body. 39For not all flesh is the same, but there is one kind for humans, another for animals, another for birds, and another for fish. 40There are heavenly bodies and earthly bodies,

( Posted by: veebdosa [Member] On: February 16, 2011 )

Utter Nonsense!
Eric, Brian, Lucie and Nae,

Thanks for your comments, it is feedback of this nature that lets me see that I have suceeded in what I tend to think of as my 'nonsense rhyme', something I love writing even if it does sometimes have a meaning hidden in the lines. (Although I am not sure Eric how your poetic response part fits in with this though it could be posted as a thought provoking stand alone.)

I am aways pleased when anybody lkes this sort of writing although this is obviously an 'unfinished piece' that I put a throw away final stanza on until I return with a couple more in the same vain.

Ron,

Thanks for looking in, but I am not sure what the message is here? Being 'very' interested in the resurection I am aware of this discusion but have dificulty relating it to my poetry. I had made an attempt (although humorous) to get people thinking about the differing theories for the commencement of Life on Earth but in no way implied I was subscribing to any of them.

The pure nonsense abour 'fish fingers' and 'parking spaces' I hoped would have given this a 'non serious' wrapping!

Thank you all once again,

Ivor

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: February 16, 2011 )

Roundabout
Hey Ivor

I see life more as a roundabout rather than having a beginning and an end...ie I started.... Mum and Dad as Creators then followed a bit of the circle of my life....

Gods circle ...cant work that one out because he cant end no matter what..... and there was nothing before him.........

( Posted by: Fairplay [Member] On: February 16, 2011 )

witty
What a fun read this was Ivor. Really enjoyed it a great deal. I've grown to believe that how we were conceived is irrelevant. What we do when we get here is what matters. Although I've a spiritual nature I've never felt the need to explain the grand schemes of it all and who or what was our creator.

@ Fairplay ..

your font is creating odd characters instead of the apostrophe. Ivor can explain it for you. He already did that for someone else. Or maybe he has already?

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: February 16, 2011 )

2 Ivor
It seems a lot of trouble
to fret over such a thing
this view a monkey to a man
Darwin's disciples wildly sing

Stitchin says we were Alien made
Slaves bred to mine needed gold
Their own atmosphere had a lack
The Ananaki being gods of old

I suggest we reverse the course
Elevated hominids can't do right
Lets be about swinging in a tree
And howling in the sweet moonlight

I don't think we are that evolved
That anything we think is right

(Except what poets deem to write)

Thanks Ivor

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: February 16, 2011 )

Home Time?
Ken

Now there's a cracking theory
if Darwin was reversed
and devolution took us
back to be immersed
in everlasting frolicking
amongst the trees so high
or even floating like a bird
in prehistoric sky.

But what I do not understand,
how far I'd have to roam
to find that Alien spaceship
when it's time to go back home...


( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: February 16, 2011 )

origin
Ivor

Simply loved this- witty, charming and in a odd odd way quite profound. ( oh by the way quite funny as well) beam me up !!!


my warmest
bob

( Posted by: TheRedCockRoach [Member] On: February 16, 2011 )

Doin' Darwin down?
I loved this, Ivor - it's sharp, witty and effortlessly-rhymed, as usual. (Glad to see in your comment, however, that you noted the throwaway ending: I was going to suggest that this seemed like a bit of a cop-out. The prior verses led me to expect the big 'ta-da-boing' of a cymbal roll which I guess you're still seeking!)

Like Lucie, I found myself wondering if Darwin would like your poem. I've spent some time researching him for an article on The Origin of Species (Slightly Foxed, Spring issue, shameless plug) and I'm sure he'd be amused. Although perhaps also bemused - no fish fingers in the 1850s!

( Posted by: MobiusSoul [Member] On: February 16, 2011 )

Poets holding hands
Come the end, we poets will be charged with rebuilding our vocabulary. Who else would we leave that to? Politicians? They only care for trophy keeping. So-called religious leaders? They would have lost their footing. Bestselling authors? They lost the thread when they made their first million.

I believe we were dreamed into being.

BTW, love that this serves as advertising for your book. Brilliant idea.

( Posted by: toscano [Member] On: February 17, 2011 )

There he goes again!
Ivor...you are the Poet Laureat of humourous rhyme that also holds a message...that makes you stop and think.

No subject is sacred to your fertile mind. What sacred cow will you disect next? Can't wait to find out!

Bea

( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: February 17, 2011 )

What's He Look Like?
Hmmm had to think about yyour comment, Ivor. Ok, referring to Genesis, proclaiming that God created man in His image...are we so sure that He is making reference to the way we look to other people and to ourselves? Maybe "His Image" is not a head with hair on it, 2 arms, atrunk, 2 legs and 2 feet..." Maybe His image is something we have not, do not, and can not even detect? What great fodder for poets, and as far as I know, no poets have even thought in this direction. They all just accept our own ignorance as to what God looks like.

That is why 1 Corinthians 35 is so relevant to your poem. Good poem, by the way.

( Posted by: veebdosa [Member] On: February 17, 2011 )

The Good Seed?
Ron,

"And what you sow is not the body that is to be, but a bare kernel, perhaps of wheat or of some other grain.

But God gives it a body as he has chosen, and to each kind of seed its own body."


I just plough the fields and scatter the seeds, then wait to see what grows!

Thanks for the explanation,

Ivor

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: February 17, 2011 )

Down on Earth
Ivor

Just thought you would appreciate this Link

http://www.youtube.com/user/lumberjackisto#p/u/23/Uo7bxWL1pns

Now if I could either play the guitar (or sing) this would be the style

( Posted by: Fairplay [Member] On: February 17, 2011 )

Isto
Eric,

I appreciate the link and the relevence to my poetry. More so, I think you have just found me another musician to admire, I love his style!

Thanks

Ivor

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: February 17, 2011 )

it's been a while, but
occasionally i like to check and see what the "most read poem" of the moment is. and here it is. congratulations.

2/19/11
8:59am

( Posted by: johnjohndoe [Member] On: February 19, 2011 )





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