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Matilda waltzes through life as she should
even though her dadís long gone for good.
He was named as fair headed game
for the claims of just a pretty boy frame.

It was come what will in lieu of allís okay
No devil to pay in the legal parlay
Time slips away from that sorry day.

Matildaís mom was left high and dry
Sadly lacking the funds to get by
She had no vows or wedding band
to permit her to take a firm stand

It was come what will in lieu of allís okay
No devil to pay in the legal parlay
Time slips away from that sorry day.

Johnny played the swain Don Juan DeMarco
He suits a super cool dude batting zero
Sailed the silver screen seas as Jack Sparrow
but that's not why Johnny Depp is her hero.

It was come what will in lieu of allís okay
No devil to pay in the legal parlay
Time slips away from that sorry day.

Johnny Depp took a page from the good book
Will and Jude gave his deed a second look
What was right was to just pony up
enough to honour friend Heathís loving cup

Now Matilda dances through every day
she is in the pink and allís A okay
Time slips away from that sorry day.

Penelope Allen
February 8th 2011

Author's Note:
Dedicated to Judy Konos who gave me the idea and permission to use it. I hope sheís back here by the time this gets posted



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"Tigers bloom where there's oodles of room." Zodiac Zoo


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The following comments are for "Who's Her Daddy"
by Pen

I read where you got the idea from...
And loved that you put your own take on it as well. Pen you are so inspiring with words. It amazes me how you can write about anything and make it look so easy. I can't even imagine all the creativity you carry around in that brain of yours. It is truly a blessing to be able to read you.

Nae ;0)

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: February 11, 2011 )

pen's lyric
Now I found this intriguing. Very clever use of language, word sounds, known themes and familiar folks. What I liked most is the switch up in last chorus - if I were to arrange this I think I would sandwich the last chorus 3-line with the normal refrain and take it out.

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: February 11, 2011 )

Nae & Ken
Many thanks for your comments. An interesting development has transpired. I received a peevish statement today about this poem.
Nae, I'm glad you saw the original post which I do have a copy of but won't post here because I believe it to be disrespectful. You see, there's been an opinion leveled by someone that they won't comment on this post because they don't know if I wrote it or if Judy did. How's that for irony? *chuckle*

Ken, I almost used the last line again and again instead of the three line refrain. I think that might have worked better. This was a hard write for me. Trying to get it lyrical while telling the story with clarity but not too much. There is a deliberate use of 'will' and 'sorry' in the refrain to reflect the story and how sorry Heath must be that he didn't keep his affairs in order. A reminder to all of us. Update your will when it's required.

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: February 11, 2011 )

From Pathetic To Subllime
Very nice Pen.

Nothing is disrespectful, when your hearts in the right place.

( Posted by: JETFIREk [Member] On: February 12, 2011 )

Judy!
thank you for dropping by for a gander! Thanks for re-registering too! Much appreciated. I didn't expect you to so I didn't bother sharing the latest news on this. Hope you stick around.

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: February 12, 2011 )

Good one
Pen,

good challenge entry. I could see it fitting a few different melodies.

And Matilda -- what a classic name to pair with Johnny Depp.

BW

( Posted by: BWOz [Member] On: February 12, 2011 )

Brian
Matilda and Johnny .. yeah .. does have a nice ring to it. Thanks for popping by.

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: February 12, 2011 )





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