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An elderly lady
whom I once knew
sat across from me
in her twenty-year youth.

she had no idea
she'd expire hunchbacked
and blind in one eye.

Copyright 2000 James D. Young

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The following comments are for "A Passing Observation"
by JamesYoung

Past her Sell By Date
Thats wicked.....Bless the Poor Old Girl

We all get to need a few plasters and stickers to keep ourselves in one piece... time goes so fast

( Posted by: Fairplay [Member] On: February 8, 2011 )

Old at birth
A true observational poem. Reminds me of the residents of the senior assisted home I visit every month with the doctor I work for.

Enjoyable read.

( Posted by: toscano [Member] On: February 10, 2011 )

makes me wonder
wonder how I'll look at my expiration date.


( Posted by: BWOz [Member] On: February 10, 2011 )

Be Careful What You Say James!
Just remember'll be old yourself someday...but then...I have 20/20 vision, and I can still stand upright! LOL!


( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: February 11, 2011 )

Too Late, Bea!
Already old and Medicare eligible. LOL. Feisty, too, sometimes. Remember the "Crankshaft" comic strip? He can be me... :)

Thx to everyone else above for their kind and humorous comments on what I've always regarded as a strange and throwaway kind of poem.

Now I'll go back and try to figure out my own "through date" in the writing dep't. - Jim

( Posted by: JamesYoung [Member] On: February 12, 2011 )

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