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green-mornings
I awake wanting you

In the ripe night
into slumbers want
I fall

breadth of dream
the world lays
shrouded

closing distance
you slowly saunter
the stars you
migrate forth

restless colors burn
Silver twinge on
metallic hands

but the sounds
are mellifluous
beneath your shadow

without a clue
you and I tether
in a dream




2/4/11


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"Some people never go crazy. What truly horrible lives they must lead." Charles Bukowski


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The following comments are for "Infatuated and dreaming (Version)"
by pablowilliams

of infatuation..
Abel,
I read as, "but the sound(s) are mellifluous"..

sweet.


( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: February 6, 2011 )

slips...
Robert- humbly noted. correction(s) will be made.

thanks for the read!

( Posted by: pablowilliams [Member] On: February 6, 2011 )

into slumbers want
It does have that dreamstate feel, where you wonder if you're actually awake with such impossible things.

Enjoyed.

( Posted by: toscano [Member] On: February 9, 2011 )

Toscano
Thank you.

I remain close.

Abel

( Posted by: pablowilliams [Member] On: February 12, 2011 )





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