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(What is it with me and shades of this or that color?)

my mind wanders
aching
searching

the grass is always greener...

what would satisfy
fill the void in me

longing without purpose

desperate
reaching franticly
for what?

a glimmer
just out of reach
what holds me?

my chains are strong
self-forged and cruel
I struggle to be free

on the horizon
a storm builds
obscuring clouds
a parody of self

slim and steady
a breaking shaft
of soft light

my aching heart
longing for release
the search is ended

filling the void
my wanderlust
satisfied

and so it seems
upon further inspection
that my grass

is just the right shade of green


David Moore

------
'But I don't want to go among mad people,' said Alice. 'Oh, you can't help that,' said the cat. 'We're all mad here.'
Lewis Carroll



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The following comments are for "Shades of Green"
by HeRoCoMpLeX

Greener Grass!
David...it's called Maturity...some people never reach that stage...always wandering...always wanting more and wondering why!

It takes a mature person to realize that having someone to love you, believe in you, fight to the death for you, and a child to cherish...is everyman's dream. But you already know that, after what you've seen and where you've been (and are going to) that you already have these things.

Hold on to them my friend...for they are precious commodities that not everyone has!

Yes...the grass IS always greener...but if you neglect it...it turns to straw!

Stay Safe!

Bea


( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: February 4, 2011 )

Green
Your shade of green is perfect! Once we see that that the shade that belongs to us is worth more than all the shades that don't put together we truly start to feel alive. Coming to terms with what we have and embracing it makes for quite a journey! Go green!

Nae ;0)

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: February 4, 2011 )

The colour of life
Let's see .. okay .. I'm hooked and not because green is my favourite colour. I like this for the message you bring. Content with the crab grass and dandelions. Good on ya!

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: February 4, 2011 )

Green is as green does
Grass need just the right amount of water and a good measure of fertilizer to be healthy and green.

This poem is as green as it gets- excellent writing.....

warmest
bob

(The red cockroach is getting a hose to water your poem- :))

( Posted by: TheRedCockRoach [Member] On: February 4, 2011 )

520-570 nanometres
as coolness to Fescue..

just right







( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: February 4, 2011 )

Green
A little Heather fact- green (dark of course) is my favorite color. And as usualy I so enjoyed this. It's simple yet deep, introspective and awakening, all with a touch of cool peace for me the comes from inside and spays like a mist at the end... And they say you're wordy... Maybe I missed they joy of reading great writes more than I thought...
Great write ..more please.
Heather

( Posted by: trynfinity [Member] On: February 5, 2011 )

My Mansion
Trick is to visit all the other sides and bring back some of the greener grass seeds to plant on your side!

Excellent poem, flowing in the right direction, but you live in the garden YOU choose but you have to plough and scatter to reap the harvest.

Thanks for an insight into your spiritual enlightenment.....


Ivor

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: February 5, 2011 )

Boy...
I'd like to read the "Chapters" that brought this on!

( Posted by: JetfireK [Member] On: February 5, 2011 )

David
A wonderful pulse that definitely grows greener with every word- lush, indeed.

I'm always excited to read you my friend.

I remain close.

Much love.

( Posted by: pablowilliams [Member] On: February 5, 2011 )

Shades of Green
I actually enjoy the title! Of course I wrote a poem called Shades of Red so my opinion might be biased. Funny how similar titles can be about totally different things.

A homerun here buddy, I like the "Self forged chains" and the image it brings to mind. Glad your grass is green, mine is looking pretty well or about to be. Always happy to read your work, Havoc

( Posted by: HavocTheDemon [Member] On: February 7, 2011 )

green
Nicely wrought. Lucid and authentic - liked the clear line of thought. Well done!

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: February 8, 2011 )

the right shade of green
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=J1NyTN3FG9s

The video is what your poem brought to mind. Nothing to do with it but the greener side but I'm simple that way.

Loved the poem, Dave. Acceptance is always good for inspiration.

( Posted by: toscano [Member] On: February 10, 2011 )

@All those who commented on "Green"
This one meant a lot to me and I'm so happy that it was so well recieved. Thank you all so much for the kind words and thoughtfull comments. It means the world to me!

( Posted by: HeRoCoMpLeX [Member] On: March 7, 2011 )

Shades of Green
Beautifully written my friend! I have been to a few pastures in my life always thinking that the grass is greener. What I wasn't told was all the manure that was flung :) Well I'm hoping the shade of ''Green'' I am about to jump into is perfect. Wish us luck!

( Posted by: vance9 [Member] On: March 7, 2011 )





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