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sometimes its forced
other times its feathery
like being touched by
a lady for the first time

mostly I battle half-worded
never truly revealing much
of anything

I can write about blood
I can write about old wounds
but I struggle with my children
with the reality of growing

others write in amazement
it comes to them naturally
standing on two legs
like pillars of fire
poetry like angels at war

not me
not me
half the time I blame
my muse for neglecting me

somehow excusing myself
from owning any
accountability

Truth:

really
my studies need water

really
my learning needs sunlight

really
my feeble laziness needs
to be weeded from my bed

("feeble laziness"
who uses that in a poem?)

please don't
misunderstand me
I certainly try

the dictionary and I
often battle hand to hand
struggling over what is natural
and which words to attach
to my soul for future use

I listen to my favorite songs
read my favorite novels
read my favorite poets

I even stare into the sky
and let the wind lift my cheeks
hoping for an idea to hit me

how cliche
sometimes it does

I try to make love like the movies
hoping to euphorically
create something that
I can write about

nothing

this poem is even
an excuse

I want you to know what
courses through my veins

I need you to read this
and validate my struggle

Will you?



pablowilliams - 1/31/11

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"Some people never go crazy. What truly horrible lives they must lead." Charles Bukowski


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The following comments are for "Pathetic poetry"
by pablowilliams

Pathetic Poetry.
Hi Abel (no more Pablo! lol)

Already commented on this on FB.

Good one!

Bea

( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: February 4, 2011 )

YES!!
I can totally say YES! I hear you! I feel you and for the record MY MUSE IS TO BLAME TOO! Who else can we blame for lack of words? Lack of inspiration? Surely not me! Loved this!!

And this my friend:

"others write in amazement
it comes to them naturally
standing on two legs
like pillars of fire
poetry like angels at war"

Your muse was obviously really close by!

Nae ;0)

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: February 4, 2011 )

Pathetic comment
"the dictionary and I often battle hand to hand
struggling over what is natural and which words to attach to my soul for future use"

Naturals don't need a dictionary and you're a natural.....

Thanks, enjoyed the simplicity of heart


( Posted by: JetfireK [Member] On: February 4, 2011 )

No way
hmmmm my take is that if you have to depend on study, or depend on learning, or depend of knowledge or anything remotely similar to any of these, then you will undoubtedly never, ever be or becoma a poet.

You are either a poet or you are not a poet, there is no learning to be a poet. No one has ever been taught to be a poet. Dream on. You may learn to construct something some might call a poem, but it will not be very good poetry. Stomp your feet, scream bloody murder, but the bottom line is no one has ever learned to be a poet.

( Posted by: VeeBdosa [Member] On: February 4, 2011 )

Pathetic it's not
This is poetry and a very good one. - I call this type of poetic form storyline poetry- You tell a personal narrative that is engaging, fluid, and for many poets -familiar- You tell a poetic story that many of can identify with- and you do it with style-

You got those writing bones....


my warmest
bob

(Santo Nicola and the red cockroach find this mundane world confusing )

( Posted by: TheRedCockRoach [Member] On: February 4, 2011 )

of Abel's poetry
Abel,
Lucie said it well within her comment, "right alongside you, Abel"..

I've witnessed your progression.. of process, form, even grammar. It's been and continues to be a pleasure.

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: February 4, 2011 )

some good some bad
there will always be good and bad notes; those writings that will stand tall and branch out unreserved, while others simply shrivel up and die. There will certainly be up's and down's....

Nea,Lucie,Jet,Roach,Bobby and Bea,
For acknowledging my expressions here, thank you. This is a very candid piece that exemplifies the fact that, 'No', we will not always have the right words.

Veeb- no comment :)

( Posted by: pablowilliams [Member] On: February 5, 2011 )





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