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traversing the night
we open wounds
to mend our pasts

tonight
all is set
to song

my voice
meanders
a razor lure
to bend you
against the
night

in your
forgiveness
I find
your thighs
turgid
soused to
anoint my
intentions

now I rest
in your womb
convicting you
of your faults
while I flavor
the night with
the redolence
of you and I




pablowilliams 5/12/08
Revised 1/31/11


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"Some people never go crazy. What truly horrible lives they must lead." Charles Bukowski


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The following comments are for "Forgive me, just once more"
by pablowilliams

shoot the juce to 'er Bruce
naughty naughty but I have to wonder if she even knew what you were doing to her? LOL

( Posted by: veebdosa [Member] On: February 3, 2011 )

Forgiven
The make up is always the best part... enjoyed reading you and I am sure she knew exactly what was happening. Loved the short lines it kept the rhythm flowing beautifully.

Nae

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: February 3, 2011 )

Spot on- thank you!
She knew; and that was the fun part :) But, she will never know that she was able to give justice to my poetry.

Thank you both for taking the time.

( Posted by: pablowilliams [Member] On: February 3, 2011 )

Giving justice
Now that was a double treat, a good climax to a fight and some poetic justice! Enjoyed!

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: February 3, 2011 )

Thanks again
Thank you so much!

( Posted by: pablowilliams [Member] On: February 3, 2011 )

of mending pasts
fragrant..in its redemption..

Abel,
As elsewhere, enjoyed..

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: February 3, 2011 )

Damn Boy!
I hope you were wearing Paul Sebastian....and carrying Ozium (comes in 500m, take your pick, mists) Damn Boy.....You sure hit it this time..... WOW

( Posted by: JetfireK [Member] On: February 3, 2011 )

Phew!
Let me catch my breath. The urgency is so well crafted in verse here - it's stunning. I nice punch to the solar plexus - lucid, lurid, lovely!

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: February 3, 2011 )

Thank you
Robert- stay close; I'm working this thing out.

Lucie- thanks for the read!

Jet- a memory that is both bitter and sweet- details? to be determined.

Ken- keep the notes coming- I'm certainly trying.

Thank you all!

( Posted by: pablowilliams [Member] On: February 3, 2011 )

a razor lure
we seek forgiveness, then fault the forgiver...awesome conflux of hunting imagery (well, fishing) and the conquest of her anger. Very hot.

( Posted by: Yania [Member] On: February 5, 2011 )

Wow!
I love the intensity that so masterfuly erupts with the joys of forgiving one another. This is the way to say i'm sorry come back, lets forgive as one and love again. It's deep passionate, with that gentle erotic touch of the soul. I wish forgiving could be so deeply cleansing all the time. Well done. This has to be a new favorite for sure.
Heather

( Posted by: trynfinity [Member] On: February 5, 2011 )

open wounds
Sensual, this. Angry sex is better than no sex at all, sez I.

( Posted by: toscano [Member] On: February 10, 2011 )





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