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Haunted droplets of silver rain
Falling from the sullen eyes
Of shattered dreams and pain
Within a man misunderstood .

Silent screams from deep within
A hopeful battered soul abused
By time reflecting life's embrace
So tight my hearts lost all hope .

Despair replaces emotions of old
Childish illusions of innocence past ,
Born from the bosom of a deceptive world
That gives substance to its own tortures .

Pray for life to imitate the dreams
Of fantasy behind the curtains of your eyes ,
Yet horror awaits for the curtain must open ,
I have awoke to another day .

And so it rains...

------
Robert Mestre

The Buddhism Primer : An Introduction to Buddhism ISBN 978-1411663343
http://buddhismprimer.blogspot.com/

Artistic Minds Society
http://materials-synthesis.com/amc/

Theravada Buddhism Online
http://buddhism.greatnuke.net/

"Exterminate all rational thought. That is the conclusion I have come to." William S Burroughs, Naked Lunch


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The following comments are for "It Rains"
by rmestre

artistic
Highly artistic and stylish writing, and for that I congratulate you.

I struggled a bit, however, to get a clear picture of the poem's message behind the words. I did get something out of it, but probably not as much as I could have.

So I'm giving it a score of 7/10, which is maybe a little low, but reflects that thought.

( Posted by: Spudley [Member] On: June 17, 2003 )





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