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So many twists,
Upon this shady path,
Forks are all too common,
Being led astray by my sinful choices.

Entangled in this lightless labyrinth,
Confusion weighs me down,
Shadows cloud my thoughts,
Demons who influence my actions.

Left or right?
Forward or back?
Ignore the mischievous voices,
And focus on the decision ahead.

Once again I am dreary crossroads,
No resolution proposes escape,
A dark figure begins to close in,
Time for thought has passed.

A swift retreat forward,
Followed by a swifter fall,
My error soon becomes transparent,
Cold stone blocks my progress.

Will power wavers,
My back to the wall,
Watching my doom approach,
Who is the devil that hounds me so?

A specter emerges from the murky fog.
His twisted features full of evil,
Crimson eyes offer no mercy,
My face…


------
Havoc


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The following comments are for "The Path"
by HavocTheDemon

re: the Path
You're not going to let that demon go, are you?

( Posted by: JetfireK [Member] On: January 27, 2011 )

Judy
It's just a poem, nothing more!

( Posted by: HavocTheDemon [Member] On: January 27, 2011 )

re: the Path
Good...then it's a GREAT poem....and for me a happy one....love ya kid...and I worry....take care.....

( Posted by: JETFIREk [Member] On: January 27, 2011 )

Havoc and his demons
An interesting piece. I've always found the image of inner demons looking back from the mirror fascinating. (As you've probably noticed.) You've done a clear and concise job of presenting this image.

My only note to an otherwise great poem would be to look for different ways to word your metaphor. A wordslinger far greater than myself once told me that nothing we right is really new. It's all pretty much been done before, it's our job to make it look new. I've strived for this and have become a better writer for it.

Great work my friend,

Dave

( Posted by: HeRoCoMpLeX [Member] On: January 28, 2011 )

sinful choices...
It has always amazed me that others will be led astray by choices we make and you have seen it too. I felt a kindred spirit here with you.

This line:
"A swift retreat forward,
Followed by a swifter fall,"

I had to keep reading it over and over, LOVED a swift retreat forward. Just the thought of going forward actually making you take steps backwards did it for me. Truly enjoyed!

Nae ;0)

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: February 4, 2011 )

My back to the wall!
http://www.lit.org/view.php?viewid=49418

You read this by Havoc (when you have a bit of time) and then I'll have someone to hold my hand while I worry myself sick over him...

Sometimes it's more than poetry and this was one of those sometimes......

Hopefully....we now have a U.S. Soldier who has moved on to serve his country....

Be sure and give us your mailing address...I send boxes to soldiers....

And don't fuss Havoc, I don't feel like hearing it...(although certain I deserve it) Just don't!

( Posted by: JetfireK [Member] On: February 4, 2011 )

Thanks everyone
Truly, I enjoy each of your writings so I'm glad I can return the favor.

@David
Thanks for the great advice. I just don't have the vocabulary of Veeb or Ken but I try my best! Glad you enjoyed it, hopefully I'll have more to write after basic.

@Nae
Wow! Your comment made my day! Didn't you take a long break from lit awhile back? I remember reading one of your..passionate peices and I loved it! Thanks for the praise :)

@Judy
Stop worrying about me so much! It's really flattering and slightly embarrassing. All I can do is laugh about it. I ship out the 22nd to Missouri for basic. Wish me luck! It's so soon! I'm sure a warm welcome awaits me when I return!

( Posted by: HavocTheDemon [Member] On: February 4, 2011 )

Ft Leonard Wood, MO
Good Luck in FORT LOST IN THE WOODS, MO, LOL.

( Posted by: veebdosa [Member] On: February 4, 2011 )

Veeb
Your comment made me laugh so hard. Good luck indeed. It seems EVERYONE knows it as "FORT LOST IN THE WOODS" lol. You are definitely not the first person I talked to who called it that and I laugh everytime. Thanks for stopping by!

( Posted by: HavocTheDemon [Member] On: February 4, 2011 )

Long break...
Yes I took a long break, not by choice though BUT guess what? I'm BACK! Laughing...

Thank you for remembering me!

Nae :0)

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: February 4, 2011 )

Inner demons!
The masks we give our demons are for some many for some just one or afew, but all of us have them. My work it's seems is generaly soaked in them most days. For me that's how I battle them. And I loved stepping for just a glimpse into someone elses battle. Tonight I needed that a lot.
It never stops amazing me how I get almost grabbed at tines by someones work, usually not realizing until i find myself stepping back into reality of my own. And gaining some wonderfuly gifted friends.
You were among one of thosegrasps on facebook.
My husband did his basic at frt. Lenordwood. It's very cold he said.
You'll do great i'm sure.
Always
Heather

( Posted by: trynfinity [Member] On: February 5, 2011 )





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