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He falls asleep so easily,
While I lay there, by his side.
I know I should sleep peacefully,
As goodness knows Iíve tried.

If I were to see his dreams,
I wonder, what would I find?
While he is as content as he seems,
I really shouldnít mind.

Itís me that he sees upon his wake,
Itís my voice that say the words I say.
I just wish that for my sake,
That I could sleep that way.



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The following comments are for "sleeping easy"
by man eating maniac

fitful slumber
M.E.M~

I like the simplicity and univeral nature of this poem. I'm sure many of us have wonder what really goes on in the mind of a sleeping lover, and those thoughts and doubts can leave us somewhat disconcerted and fearful. Excellent job. I however would consider working on the second line in the third stanza it seems too forced and a bit confusing. But that's just my 2 yen.

( Posted by: Bartleby [Member] On: June 17, 2003 )

thanks for spotting it too
i knew that it didn't work as well as it could have, but i thought what the hell!
and now i have dearly for it, i am going to cry now. i will rewrite this line. thanks again!

( Posted by: man eating maniac [Member] On: June 18, 2003 )





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