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THE CAPTAINS NEW YEARS PETITION
Avast ye mates, ye ghast and scurvy crew!
Tonights the night, if I can calculate,
to mend our ways, and do what we can do
in betterin' what's handed out by fate;

I know yer minds be set on comely thighs
but none there be, within a hundred days
so think a bit within yer minds' own eyes
and play the part that ev'ry lover plays;

and we should spend some time down on our knees
and make our case known to the Lord of all
petitionin' for wind, and sand and trees
where welcomes us some ladies thin and tall.

As this new year comes in, let's make it right,
by prayin for some ladies of the night.

------
VeeBdosa
Fort Knox, KY


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The following comments are for "Captains Prayer"
by veebdosa

good
Very direct and got to the point,not used to reading pirate talk but that is okay. The way you write it sounds like a pirate.
Keep on writing, I like it alot and very creative.

( Posted by: louiemary [Member] On: January 3, 2011 )

Captains Prayer
My God - Ron you gave your self a 9 - I'll give you a 3 so that it averages closer to the truth. Clever - I'll wager it took you 5 minutes to write. there's no doubting your skill - you are better than this so how about a little more effort.
Ken

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: January 3, 2011 )

re: Captain's Prayer
I think your poem is excellent with the soundings of a True Pirate.

It's a bit risque but in good taste.

Thank You...

( Posted by: JetfireK [Member] On: January 4, 2011 )

herrdom2
Noted, Jon but it were a accident, I swear it was, when I clicked 9, I meant to give it a 10.

LouiemaRY, YOU HAVE indeed stumbled onto one of the critical criteria for creating a succesful poem, the ability to make it sound like whom you are writing about. This piece indeed does just that, a very successful poem.


( Posted by: veebdosa [Member] On: January 4, 2011 )





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