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You running through my veins and
then sudden relief
crashes like a wave hastening through,
bleeding me out.
Heart racing
beats go faster and faster
till I can breathe in.
Out of control
rush
rush
rush
take it quicker
take it deeper
each pulse faster
beat
beat
beat
and then it all stops.
I shut you out,
You
my drug.
Her,
her,
always her,
my heart is losing.
Nothing flows,
nothing moves,
just stop.
No beats.
None.
Slower
and slower
until it all comes to an end,
A sudden halt,
an urgent violent STOP!
Regurgitate these
feelings so I can bring
them under control,
they lay all over
a mess of
anger, distrust, rage, fear,
FEAR!
FEAR!
Begging to break free
If I get a fix,
a fix of you
I'll never be able
to rinse my blood clean again.


5-10-2010


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I am on a journey. Looking for Me. Everyday I get a little closer. The more time goes by the more I realize I'm always changing. This journey could take forever... Renae L. Soler


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The following comments are for "Detox"
by nae411

Nae
I had a few guys who made me feel like that...but it's been so long ago I can hardly remember...Now I cough and sputter and try to catch my breath from old age...Good reading...Kacee

( Posted by: Nitz Kitty [Member] On: December 19, 2010 )

an urgent violent STOP!
Madre mia! Was passing through and noticed you finally posted something new. Good thing it's raining 'cos I think I need a cold shower.

( Posted by: toscano [Member] On: December 19, 2010 )

Nae's addiction
Renae,
..warming a chilly evening- accomplished..

experience enjoyed

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: December 19, 2010 )

Cold showers!
Oh Nea...soo good to see you posting here again...see...I told ya there was life in the ole girl yet!! And Wow...Nae and Francisco stopped by...who knows who will be next!

Looks like all the guys will be needing cold showers now that you are back!

Racy but tasteful...not titillating for effect!

Love ya,
Bea

( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: December 20, 2010 )

Detox Him Away....
I hope this is poetry and not a bad case of reality.......which leads you (eventually) to

Thank God for unanswered prayers........

( Posted by: JetfireK [Member] On: December 20, 2010 )

i read this poem on
christmas eve. i like this poem. merry christmas too.

( Posted by: johnjohndoe [Member] On: December 24, 2010 )

Temptress
Nae,

I see you've not changed a lot.....

Ivor

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: February 6, 2011 )

Gee... thanks!
Hey guys. I forgot I posted this here. It was an angry moment BUT one I have surpassed!! Yeah for me! Those addictive loves that are poison to us will eventually be the end of us!

Lucie, thank you so much for always getting me. And hearing Poet from you is my favorite name ever! Love you!

Eric, laughing so hard when I saw "Temptress," I knew exactly who was writing to me!

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: February 7, 2011 )

Goofed... Ivor
I meant Ivor! Sorry about that! At least I kept things all in the family! Hugs.

Nae

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: February 10, 2011 )

Haha Nae
It's OK Nae in the earlier days Ivor got the blame for me being on Lit...some though he was playing me as one of his own characters....

I will say ... Ivor says you havn't changed

I say you HAVE changed

I don't even need Poetic licence to say You are one Special Sexy Lady....

Eric

( Posted by: Fairplay [Member] On: February 10, 2011 )

Thank you Eric!
Yes I remember when some said that... too funny!
Thank you very much, you made me blush! I have changed have I? I know I have but surprised you think so.

Hugs,
Nae ;0)

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: February 10, 2011 )





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