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There was once a musician
Whom loved to play the guitrums
No, no! The trianguitar
Yes, yes, the trianguitar.
He was in a heavy spanish band
No, No! A hard rap band
Yes, yes, a hard rap band.
He decided to call someone on his tellular phone
No, No! The telepager
Yes, yes, the telepager.
He learned to play the telephar one day
No, No! The guitelephone
Yes, yes, the guitelephone.
But his ampliphone was broken
No, No! His triangaphonafar
Yes, yes, his triangaphonafar.
This happened on a late Octember morning
No, No! A late Novagust morning
Yes, yes, a late Novagust morning.

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...And they did shake the world with battle.


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The following comments are for "A Stupid Poem"
by DragonReborn

interesting to say the least
where on earth did you come up with this?
some of the word fly right onver the head and are therefore difficult to say out loud. (this is how i read poetry, i don't know about anyone else)
but all in all it flows nicely!

( Posted by: man eating maniac [Member] On: June 18, 2003 )

creative :-)
*grin* I love creative stuff like this. It's got a healthy dose of ingenuity, and you've got the rhythm working well too.

The best 'nonsense poems' are the ones that despite all the wacky words, actually seem to almost make sense, until you try to work it out - kinda like seeing something out of the corner of your eye, and then losing it when you turn to look.

This one works brilliantly on that score.

Score 8/10.

(ps - I wasn't brave enough to read it aloud like the maniac above! ;-))

( Posted by: Spudley [Member] On: June 18, 2003 )

Thanks
Thanks. My other poem, entitled "Stupid Poem" (another original title, huh?) is better, though, I think. Or, if you go to www.writingforums.com, you'll see another, about the land called Analapookie or Alapanookie or something like that. Well so what! How am I supposed to remember names like that?!

( Posted by: DragonReborn [Member] On: June 18, 2003 )





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