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My strange life as we in endeavors
The abused soul,
tormented and spun beyond contradictions
A young mind has only this what remains

It will be alright, you will be safe, alright
please just tell me off
will be alright, just let your self expand with what remains
tell me you will be alright, safe, alright

This bridge to overcome, my setbacks
There is no use to holding back and we, no use
icy conditions are predicted on the paths made
New tires, new jackets, Identity, bright identity
This is who we are, who we are

A roach climbing the wooden chairs
behold the place and we hold, we hold
The place of who we are, the insect
climbing the wooden subway chairs.

Long tunnels of light are danger, Look past and down
Another, Path to what we are,
Find this light leaving and revealing the blue and the green
Walk this path, you know we will be awoken

Awoken to follow this tunnel, where
Rodents, villains and gossip swarms
Please awaken me with this choice for choices
My eyes grow weary with darkness.

It will be alright, you will be safe, alright
please just tell me off
will be alright, just let your self expand with what remains
tell me you will be alright, safe, alright
We all have grown, all have grown








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The following comments are for "1.1-post~"
by NucleusFire

With a grain of salt
I read this a few times over, trying to unravel what I felt was 'me' just not getting it. The subject, I liked, but for some reason, I had a hard time following the form. But, then again, what do I know. Still, an enjoyable read for its thematic element. Thanks for sharing.

( Posted by: pablowilliams [Member] On: December 11, 2010 )





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