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Wasting away
itís always the same
blue skies shift to dark clouds

Still I search
for that green clover
in a dreary garden

Sweet words turn salty
their outer coating a mere deception
another bad memory sealed in the vault

Another day ends
home is an enemy
none await my arrival

The silence seeks to drag me down
despair gains a foothold
in the lonely dark

Yet a simple desire remains within
a thousand stars would not outshine me
if I could finally change
my facebook status to taken


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The following comments are for "Lonely"
by HavocTheDemon

Hang in there
this hit close to home for reasons I have never been comfortable sharing. There is an eternal quality here. A voice, lonely, in need of discovering. I feel the pain.

( Posted by: pablowilliams [Member] On: November 20, 2010 )

@ Pablo
Thanks for reading and especially commenting! I suppose I'm somewhat happy with it, though I'm sure it could capture the feeling a little better if I worked on it a bit more. Thanks again, I'm always happy when someone has something to say about my work.

( Posted by: HavocTheDemon [Member] On: December 1, 2010 )

To Havoc & Pablo
For those who claim they cannot find the one that they do seek?
Is it fair to ask if you "pretend" you're plain and not unique?
Have you , at your age, not learned the treasure that you are?
Or must you depend on Lit.Org to remind you from afar?

To us you are, indeed, Friend, Master of the pen,
To understand your youth, with us you must have been!
Since that could never be because your birth was late,
Just know that there are those who truly think you're great!

( Posted by: JetfireK [Member] On: December 1, 2010 )

Ha! Your poem was magnificent. A much needed "pick me up." It really made me laugh. The word choice was great and it flowed brilliantly. Thanks for sharing dear friend :)

( Posted by: HavocTheDemon [Member] On: December 1, 2010 )

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