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What was there
For you to lean like you did?
I stared and missed nothing.
Surely, you had to tie your shoelaces
Or tighten your tights…

I stared and missed nothing
While you took your time.

The girl at the counter said,
“Dollar sixty-seven!”
And without even looking at her,
I handed her a five.

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The following comments are for "One day at Tim Hortons"
by niel3995

your poem surprised
me. it's like a poem about nothing, really. and yet, it made me stop and think about it. i guess that's what surprised me. i liked it a lot.

( Posted by: johnjohndoe [Member] On: November 7, 2010 )

One day
clear ,lucid snapshot. I enjoyed this.

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: November 7, 2010 )

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