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Plains of Shinar
(Third Age)

Plains of Shinar beckon me as beckoned men before,
whence called to distance from our Lord,
came fools in search of more.

In vanity I gave my hands ambitious tasks of men,
then stood atop my tower proud,
yet always built again.

Till piercing through the clouds above, no longer could I see
my smaller brethren far below,
now lesser men than me.

Exalted in my heights of pride
with godliness thereof,
blinded thus, I finally heard
the voice of God above.

“Come out of her my fallen child, ignore ye not my call!
Rejoice ye not in mighty works,
your Babylon must fall.”

Plains of Shinar beckon me, ghosts of vanity,
lead me back from fallen walls
to humble, bended knee.

Genesis 11:2-4



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The following comments are for "Plains of Shinar (Third Age)"
by themadgerman

Plains
Loved it - grand imagery and vision.

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: November 7, 2010 )

Babylon
Jim,

Not being deeply religious in the way potrayed in most of your poetry, I must admit I have 'avoided' leaving comments on your poetry due to several 'clashes' I have had when commenting on religious themes.

However, ALL of your poetry I have read is of exceptional quality and 'right up my street' for style and flow. You are possibly in my opinion the best poet on the site by my individual standards.

The theme in this poetry, as does most of your work, falls in line with my personal views and is presented in a very dramatic and 'soul searching' way.

My apologies for not commenting in the past.

Kudos,

Ivor

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: November 8, 2010 )





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