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I have miles on my feet
Heart is heavy with defeat
I have sorrow in my soul
Burning up, letting go.
I have darkness in my head
All alone walking dead

I have miles on my feet
Walking hard, rain and sleet
Following the beat
Of the drummerís cooling heat.

Walk past families and friends
Smiling soft, holding hands,
I have numbness in my bones
As the world leaves me alone,
Dark in its tone,
Further from home,

I have miles on my feet
Soaked with memory and grief.
Marching at the street
Always forward, always neat,

I have miles on my feet,
Failing fast, keeping weak,
Miles on my feet,
As the black begins to seep.

I have miles in my feet,
Miles in my feet.




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Remember my friend, despite all you are, all we are, the universe will tick on, long past our departure.


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The following comments are for "I have miles on my feet."
by Thea Veol

Frosty Metaphore...
Very good. reminds me of Robert Frost's STOPPING BY WOODS ON A SNOWEY EVENING, especiall the classic last line "and miles to go before I sleep..."

Bea help me out My Internet is locked up. This Frost poem is not a villanella, right? But for some reasons this poem, by Thea Voel calls to mind the villanella form and Frost for me.

I have to look it up but can't right now, I only recall that the villanelle is probably the most difficult form to do and do right. At least it was for mee when I last tried it.

Good work here,l Thea.

( Posted by: VeeBdosa [Member] On: November 6, 2010 )

Feet and miles
I liked this. Very lyrical and would make for a good song!

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: November 7, 2010 )





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