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Knock on my Door

Always before I would run to you
When you decided we were through
I was out the door and after you
But this time babe
I will not bow
I will find the strength somehow
To wait and stand firm

Come knock on my door this time
I will not go to you on my knees
My heartís still trying to run to you
But I have no choice
Cause my pride wonít bend anymore

Your weapon of choice was a slamming door
Most times I never knew what for
I gave but you kept wanting more
But youíve cried wolf for the last time
I donít want to be unkind
But I will not be your toy

Come knock on my door this time
I will not come to you on my knees
My heartís still trying to run to you
But I have no choice
Cause my pride wonít bend anymore

I still love you so
I donít wanna let you go
But you have played me for a fool
Iíve turned the table this time
And now the move is mine
If you come back to me
Youíre going to have to beg on bended knees

Come knock on my door this time
I will not come to you on my knees
My heartís still trying to run to you
But I have no choice
Cause my pride wonít bend anymore

David Moore

'But I don't want to go among mad people,' said Alice. 'Oh, you can't help that,' said the cat. 'We're all mad here.'
Lewis Carroll

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The following comments are for "Songwriters Challenge"
by HeroCoMpLeX

Good work Dave!!!
Love it...have you written a melody for it yet??

Would love to hear it!


( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: October 19, 2010 )

Great work! Now it just needs music!

( Posted by: HavocTheDemon [Member] On: October 19, 2010 )

Still Trying to Run....
This is really cool...but I think the bridge..saying "I still love you so, I don't want to let you go".....

Bet she can wiggle back into your life if she really tries.....hard...and bet she won't bend her knee. Nothing like a guy in love......

It's really a romantic song...and VERY...COOL

( Posted by: JetfireK [Member] On: October 19, 2010 )

Bea: Yes, there is a tune and no I didn't write it. This is loosely, and I stress that word, written to already exsisting music. I'm only marginaly passable on the guitar so I usually just pick a song I like and write new words. Thanks for the comment! It means a lot to me.

Havoc: Thanks for the kind words buddy!

Jetfire: The line in the bridge that you pointed out is more to say that while his instincts are telling him to just break down and beg for her back, he's going to be strong and make her come back to him. Who knows though, she may very well bat her eye lashes at him and he'll break, but he's putting up a good front for now... ;)
Thanks for the kind words!

Much Love,


( Posted by: HeRoCoMpLeX [Member] On: October 19, 2010 )

Knock Knock Knock...
Dave..YES.. I thoroughly's just so humorous to me because the poor guy hasn't got a prayer....It's really good...Thanks Again.....

( Posted by: JetfireK [Member] On: October 20, 2010 )

Hey if I may take on the challenge, I posted something I wrote today in English class, well it's a poem but it should do the job... it is called Regrets if you want to see it

( Posted by: Sami93 [Member] On: October 20, 2010 )

I'm in a kindly but contrary way today. so forgive me ahead of time. I liked it buddy - and - the verse/story and bridge work well. I think you need to work on tightening up the chorus and finding a catchy phrase as a hook- 'Come knock on my door - this time' would end and resolve the chorus nicely. When I sat down with the guitar the refrain seemed a bit to wordy - I fault of mine as well . I don't know the melody you used and I may be way off base. Just a thought.

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: October 20, 2010 )

I'm sorry itís taken me so long to offer thanks for your comment. I've been in an advanced mechanics school and I'm just getting to my emails and such.

This song is written loosely to the tune of a Maroon 5 song called "This Love". I say loosely because I took a few liberties with the cadence to make the words fit. It works, although a bit awkwardly at times. The first line of the refrain for "This Love" is

"This love has taken its toll on me"

and then my line

"Come knock on my door this time"

They put their "hook" in the first line and I just kind of followed suit. In this case, I was following your advice when you said if youíre not real good at writing music to just pick your favorite song and write new words. Thus, this monstrosity was born. The truth is that I'm not real happy with it. All of the songs I've submitted save one (which was written to an Eagle Eye Cherry tune) have been completely original, if a bit on the elementary side musically. This one felt a bit rushed to me but the muse shot me a fax and I wrote it anyway...I think maybe this one was bit fuzzy and hard to read. (Stupid fax machine) ;)

Much Love and thanks for the comment,


( Posted by: HeRoCoMpLeX [Member] On: October 27, 2010 )

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