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Oh muse, you merciless bitch
So long since I complained
Why have you forsaken me

I walk in shadows
Free writing
Trying to find my way

Floundering in a sea
Of mediocrity

Remembering a time
When my rhyme flowed
With ease

Struggling to find a balance
Like ice skating
Uphill

Wishing to take back
My words

A writer’s lament
Repented


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'But I don't want to go among mad people,' said Alice. 'Oh, you can't help that,' said the cat. 'We're all mad here.'
Lewis Carroll



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The following comments are for "Reckless Wishes"
by HeRoCoMpLeX

Muse
I almost laughed when I read the first line. I think every writer knows this feeling! That first line is my favorite lol. I like how you ended it decisively with one word, Repented. Solid piece of writing!

( Posted by: HavocTheDemon [Member] On: October 18, 2010 )

muse
I go through a little fit of 'what am I going to write about' every time I sit down to write...and when I shake off the doubt and just put my fingers to the keys something always comes. Now having written that...what will often come isn't very good...but it down - there on the screen or on the paper and that is what we have to do as writers. Writing nothing - isn't writing. Most everything I type down is the seed for something that often , in my opinion,is pretty good. The more you write the better you will get. The muse will always be there ... and she knows that in any human's mind there is always a great deal of flotsam and jetsam - rants,dark moody thought,fragments of thoughts on feelings, happy funny stuff, and snippets of brilliance (If only to the writer) and terrific nonsense all worthy of an attempt to join words together on a screen or piece of paper.
Dave this poem, sans muse (She was there) was fun and entertaining and shows exactly what I say. A writer -writes. They rest takes care of itself.

I did lay out a sigh of relief at 'Repented' I mean, I could be wrong! ;)

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: October 18, 2010 )

Dave's Muse!
Been there...done that...We ALL have been there at one time or the other!

I'm delighted to see that both you and Johnpenny acknowledge the fact the the muse is a woman!
Who else would be that elusive and contrary!!!!!

Loved this Dave!

Bea

( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: October 19, 2010 )

Havoc, Ken, and Bea
Thank you all so much for the kind words and insightful critiques! Much appreciated!

Havoc: It was very decisive in my head. This piece is a follow to an earlier poem called "Writers Lament" where I was bitching and moaning about how when the muse strikes, we as writers, are almost burdened with getting the words out quickly. I have been repenting my bitching a lot lately because I've been struggling a bit for ideas. I think she heard me though, cause slowly but surely, they are coming to me again. Thanks for reading my friend!

Ken: You are very rarely wrong when it comes to poetry. Why do you think I am always hounding you to comment on my stuff. I value your advice most of all. You and Shannon were, and still are, my poetry and lyric mentors. Thank you for the insightful bit of advice. It means the world to me!

Bea: Ahh yes, the muse is most definitly a "she". She could not be anything but a she. LOL, can't with her and can't live without her. thanks for stopping by!!!

Much Love to you all,

Dave

( Posted by: HeRoCoMpLeX [Member] On: October 21, 2010 )

Merciless Bitch
Dave,

I often say I do not find free written poetry to my liking unless it is so good I do not realise it does not rhyme. In essence this works in reverse rhyming poetry is only goog when the rhyme is really not noticable but it is just the medium the poetry is written in.

With this in mind this poetry 'Reckless Wishes' is very good. I enjoyed reading it and easly flow with your style, I wish I could write in freestyle with pieces like this. I can find no formula for it .... it is just right.

I can give you umpteen formulas for Rhyme (most of which I ignore) and I tend to write without thinking like I suspect you do also. You have asked me to look at 'Mistress' and respond and I just want to set the scene before I do so.

I feel your current writing style is brilliant and I will possibly be advising that this is where you should concentrate whether in rhyme or freetyle. Poetry is at the heart of it all and while it can be moulded into styles, you have the 'gift' and should not be forced away from your natural ability by rules etc..

Again this is an excellent piece and I am glad I looked at your work and found it!

Ivor

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: October 22, 2010 )





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