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Holding onto ideas
That have
No relevance

Outdated sonets
Requiring someone
Of your own time
To understand

To free you from
Your trepidations
Your solidarity
Your greed

Another gift to you
Folded and placed
In your pocket

To no longer neglect
What aspires
To be your best interest

The uniform of pride
Crisp on a tattered soul
Seen by a keen eye
Avoided by ones who know

A loosing gamble
By chance remorse
After a sullen morning
Unable to pay out on a rare success

How fast
The glory fades
Embers to ash
In a heartbeat

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The following comments are for "sullen"
by mason

Hey Mason
Really liked this one - last two stanzas rock!

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: October 7, 2010 )

i feel this one...nice

( Posted by: cmsmuse [Member] On: October 12, 2010 )

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