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Pt. 1

Heart pushes
And you live
Heart pushes Love
And you buy her breakfast
Love pushes Brain
And you want your money back

Pt. 2

Moon is a crescent because something's missing
Earth takes notice

Earth pushes Wind pushes Water pushes Sand
And you make a castle

Crescent Moon projects a crescent light
Parting your castle
In the yellow light is where I used to sleep
In the darkness is where something dark lives
Darkness has a hunger
Looking for snacks
All I wanted a banana
But you ate it already

As you stand in the yellow light
Apologizing about my banana
With a hand full of snacks behind your back
In a shadow-

The dark thing smirks

A Sting pushes Skin pushes Brain pushes Hand squishes Bug
And you wipe it off

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The following comments are for "Confetti Eyes"
by PeriwinkleMoses

good eyes askew - witty and cool!

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: October 7, 2010 )

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