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She is spoken to quite abruptly by the man in his famous coat. I am not sure, I must admit, how she came to be so passive. I once knew her as a fiery and vivacious girl, filled with passion and purpose. But now the mouse is roared thin by years of tiny dents, misshaping redesigning, destroying and crippling. The broken window weeps in flat tones for the world it once saw and a single tear wells up in her eye.

If only, I think. If only. Myself becomes a vessel for what she should be angered by the pathetic and feeble way she is. Crying now I watch, he slaps her across the face and she is silent. For the first time I agree with him. She deserved that slap, she should have killed him by now. The girl I knew would have picked up those broken shards and slit his throat, torn the skin until his red face turned pale and empty.

But she doesn’t. She falls sobbing to her knees, shaking in fits and sadness. And I shake my head and walk away.

Remember my friend, despite all you are, all we are, the universe will tick on, long past our departure.

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The following comments are for "Walk by."
by Thea Veol

Walk on by
Sad how the dents and cuts erode our power - and those cowardly and stricken predators who wait until the wounded walk by to gain theirs. Neither one is a natural creature.

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: October 11, 2010 )

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