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There are some things that only the heart can reveal...

A softly played melody deep in my soul
drawing me closer to where my spirit
knows it must go.

My mind does not understand this inward tune but my heart beats to the notes of a love song within.

I see it all as it is given to be,
pictures of a place I long to see.
A silhouette of someone who waits for me. He hears the same melody that draws me near.

For this is a love song written and held in heaven. Now being released to
bring together a love that has never been.

Listen carefully to your love song within. Let not your mind try to understand. It was composed by someone greater than we.

Follow your heart that beats to this melody that has been tuned so intimately.

Search no more for I am on my way. It is by this love song that guides me into your arms to stay.



------
Ms. Janice G Presson



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The following comments are for "My Love Song"
by JGP

melody
Since you put it into the category of Lyrics, I'm assuming you've got a melody in mind for this piece?

Reading it as poetry, I struggled to find the pace and rhythm for it - a number of the lines seemed too long - but I guess they fit the melody you have in mind.

Looking at the words, there were several points that I thought were quite good. The shorter verses were generally my favorites, though.

Score 7/10.

( Posted by: Spudley [Member] On: June 12, 2003 )

My Love Song
Thanks Spidley. The answer to your question is yes. This song has already been set to music. It is due to be published on CD in the fall. The publisher is International Poetry.
Thank you for your comment. You may if you like view my web-sit. JGP Creations at http://www.geocities.com/janicepb2002

( Posted by: JGP [Member] On: June 13, 2003 )





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