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These words can't match you
they can't find that fire
you have

These words are nothing
just spit and cough
in the light
of yours

but I give these to you
rusty
broken
yesterday's mud

it's all I can find
all I can afford

the flowers don't bloom much
not enough to make you a bed
just enough to bring some color
and a bouquet to say
"I love you"




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The following comments are for "What I Have"
by rancidsauce

Fellow poet
My friend, I wish I had your pen. You write with such poignancy, exact, not an ounce of fat. I love your work. Thank you for this.

( Posted by: pablowilliams [Member] On: August 15, 2010 )





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