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Mockery induced recoil and the silent storm of sequential insecurities.

The soul too distant to hear the verve beat of another's heart.

Close enough to be influenced by the reverberation of libelous contempt.

Tomorrow's rain cannot wash away the pain of what was whispered to strangers,
Especially what was left unspoken?

Seized deep in the lagoon gathered from yesterday's calamitous torrent.

Tears that burn not from brackish run yet from the constant flow of loss.

Is sorrow redundant that which refuses to diminish?

Is it superfluous to mourn the casualty of what thought vanished?
Yet in truth never was?

Contemptuous ridicule of one's own heart is karmic fuel
For destiny's cruel twist on what was previously scribed.

Passing of time knows no conclusion, no consolation for the death of spirit.

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The following comments are for "River of Sorrow"
by AzureMoon77

Nice imagery and high language. I liked it much better when I read it aloud. Welcome! Good start.

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: August 7, 2010 )

River of Sorrow
Your poem eloquently expresses the fact that those sensitive enough to detect subtle slights from others and insecure enough to be influenced by them are destined to suffer. However, I disagree with your conclusion. I think even a ravaged spirit can with time be hardened and refreshed. An excellent poem. Keep your pen to paper.

( Posted by: JackGrady [Member] On: August 8, 2010 )

River of Sorrow
Words pick high levels of sensitivity. Sort of like the high cirrus clouds in the sky.

( Posted by: poewhit [Member] On: August 8, 2010 )

Passing of time knows no conclusion
Reading your post made me think it may have been written about my current family situation or your own personal one. But I know it wasn't.

Liked that you separated the lines because it gives each individual image room to breathe. As a whole, it presents a striking image - one punctuated/lit by acceptance.

Welcome friend.

( Posted by: toscano [Member] On: August 8, 2010 )

River of Sorrow!
How Poignant and another example of how damaged we become from other's opinion of us...warranted or not!

Parents must realize that how we speak to our children in their formative years, can have consequences for them for the rest of their lives...long after we've said them in a moment of anger. Words are powerful tools in the handbook of parenting...use them wisely!

Wonderful poem Kelly!

( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: August 8, 2010 )

River of Sorrow
Thank you all for reading and commenting : )

( Posted by: AzureMoon77 [Member] On: August 16, 2010 )

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