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All those bright stars
that held me on course
have faded
in the light of you

and now you dim
or is it me?
starving for you
starving for real life
real love
real truth beyond this lie
that has taken so many
heart beats
false words
false hopes
false happiness
store bought
plugged in
left out
and constantly reminding me
that I was wrong

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The following comments are for "Here On The Isle of Lie"
by rancidsauce

time to look for the bright stars again...

( Posted by: cmsmuse [Member] On: July 9, 2010 )

This truly is good. Its so specific in your wording but general enough so anyone can really understand the dark emotions you describe. This could almost be a song. I'm far from a poetry expert as I'm terrible at it but I really like this. Great work, I'm going to keep an eye out for your work from now on!

( Posted by: HavocTheDemon [Member] On: July 10, 2010 )

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