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The shadows have been cast your way,
both dark and bleak, and black and gray,
to play upon your foolish mind,
no one can reach or ever find,
where you have been and where you'll stay

in search of truth that is not there,
although you feel it everywhere,
illusive as your last nights dream,
where nothing's quite as it would seem,
and so you only sit and stare.

You try to make some sense of it,
the love you've known still hurts a bit,
though time has eased the flowing tears,
the pain goes on for years and years,
and you will not get over it.

Fort Knox, KY

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The following comments are for "YOUR VERY LAST LOVE"
by veebdosa

Your very Last Love
Very nice poetic expression, using soft pastel words.

This poem possesses a duality of quiet simplicity and laser beam complexity.

I truly admire your choice of words creating a masterpiece from a block of stone.

Poem possesses a smooth silky texture, blowing freely by the Southern Winds


( Posted by: FireFly747 [Member] On: June 20, 2010 )

This resonates, Veeb
This one really resonated with a widow... though I'm sure you were referring to love rejected.

My husband was my first AND last love...and it's quite true that the pain lessens as the years go by and you learn to live with it...but it never goes away!

( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: June 20, 2010 )

last love
My friend - this one is simple and sweet- a was captivated and carried nicely along to its final truth.. Good one!

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: June 22, 2010 )

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