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Without You
 

 
You don't know what you have,
 
'Til it's lost.
 
You were taken away by the path
 
Of ultimate cost.
 

 
Your path is a destroyer
 
And it slowly tore you from my arms.
 
Right there, in the hospital foyer,
 
I heard those words, which hold no charm.
 

 
Those words cause crushing,
 
From whomever it comes.
 
It came from those rushing,
 
'Til at last you were numb.
 

 
Those words came like a blow,
 
And it crushed my heart completely.
 
Those words said? "We're so, so
 
Sorry.

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I'm a wanna-be writer. But so was John Grisham, so who knows?


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The following comments are for "Without You"
by tissue

re: without you
The first stanza needs work. Seemed very forced and I had trouble reading it. The last stanza seems to be your strength and this is no exception, very good last stanza. Good job over all.

( Posted by: Chrispian [Admin] On: June 5, 2003 )





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