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A mother remembers

Touching her round belly

Joy, mixed with fear, always racing through her veins

A great day was soon to come

A day when heaven would open its gates

And release an angel

All in heaven would mourn

As they are departed from a precious friend

And a mother sheds her own tears

As she receives God's gift

Where heaven lose one she gains one



Eight years later

A mother touches her flat stomach

Sadness, darkness, and confusion race through her veins

An unusual silence spreads across the sky

A day where heaven rejoice

As an angel returns



A mother sinks into a muddy slate

Where her daughter rest

And so does a part of her soul

Emptiness harvest her spirit

And destroys her hope

As she eternally long

To hold her angel once more



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The following comments are for "HOLLOW"
by DBurke

nice
good job creating a vivid story with this, and reminding us that there is good and bad in everything

( Posted by: RMFraser [Member] On: June 8, 2010 )

Poetry
Thank you. Very deep thinking....Very unusual...

( Posted by: JetfireK [Member] On: June 8, 2010 )

Hollow
The observer is the participant - well written. Thank you for sharing this.

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: June 9, 2010 )

hollow
sad, but beautifully told...

( Posted by: cmsmuse [Member] On: June 9, 2010 )





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