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You listened to the obdurate stutter of an old love. John. Your own Greek god. You could still see his image. The tight-assed, tall, young man from London. His hair was always straight and shiny, as if God himself brushed it a hundred times. Dark round eyes. Seductive lips. You were always drawn to his lips. They were soft. Sweet. His tongue tasted like strawberries soaked in honey. His breath reminded you of fresh mint. If he was wine, you could have sucked him down glass after glass. John. He was your John.

He was intoxicating. Addictive. Utterly, maddeningly addictive. He was the love of your life. But you’ve grown apart. You chose to be stirringly bold. He chose to be plain. He never liked complications. He had his music. He had life back home. Home where people were content with being repetitive and dull. You abhorred that.

John was never ambitious. And that drove you crazy. You were poles apart. You were palpitating with life. Always on the go. He was calm and restrained in so many ways. And that just irritated you to the very core.

Today you saw him when you went to pick up something at the grocery shop. Gone is the old John. Gone is his charm. You saw a bitter, drunk man. You almost did not recognize him. Yes, your heart skipped a beat. You felt sweat at the back of your neck. You almost jumped when he stared at you. Then you noticed the empty look on his face. It was then you knew you did the right thing when you dumped him. You are better off without him. You stared back at him for a second. Then you continued going. You felt his gaze on your back. You chuckled. “Never again.” you thought.

And life goes on without the old stutter of that old, lost love.


The following comments are for "LOST LOVE"
by weepingwillow

life goes on
Reads like an outline for a novel. Or short story. Good use of language. Would love to read more.

( Posted by: toscano [Member] On: July 4, 2010 )

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