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She dreams at night of dolphins dancing; 
frolicing on white-surf foam in vast turquoise oceans, 
playfully singing serene melodies, gentle wisdom brooding 
in dark shining eyes. Their gaze beckons to hers. Childhood 
memories spring forth, sailing adrift on her father's sail 
boat in fresh water lakes near Charlevoix and Traverse City 
Michigan. Wide brown eyes of a six-year-old eagerly scan the 
watery currents for signs of mermaids. 
 
"Not to worry." Father's voice reassures over her shoulder. 
"They're probably busy rescuing sailors from drowning in Davey 
Jones's locker. But if you keep your eyes open, you might  
catch a glimpse of one someday." 
 
"Do they turn into dolphins too? Like in that one story you 
read me?"  
 
"Dunno, could be. The sea's a strange place, it holds a lot of  
wonders." 
 
The little girl watches and waits. To this day, she's never 
stopped wondering, every time her dark eyes glimpse the depths 
of Mother Earth's lifeblood. Never stopped hoping, deep down 
in her heart, eyes wide open, just in case.


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The following comments are for "Weaving a Dreamcatcher's Tale"
by Tigerlily

Eyes wide open
I love the phrase, "eyes wide open, just in case." What a beautiful, succinct phrase for a life being lived wide open to possibility. The whole poem is a lovely setup to that perfect reveal.

( Posted by: Cybele [Member] On: June 3, 2003 )

Enchanting
This one caught my eye. Beautifully descriptive. Entertaining and whimsical, yet with a good thought provoking side to it too. Good ending too.
9/10.

( Posted by: Spudley [Member] On: June 4, 2003 )

keep it up
I really loved it. A sweet piece, fairytale-like with a romantic/nostalgic touch without being too childish or too candy cane.
The essence of the dolphins is greatly painted, and the title ads just that extra sniff of mystery.
Nice message too: never forget your childhood hopes and dreams, they make the world a wonderful place.
regards, Pam

( Posted by: PamHKyle [Member] On: November 5, 2005 )





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