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Lava maggots ripping through flesh

Rot in the air

And blood,

Some is fresh

Heat all around to unimaginable degrees

Blisters on the tongue

Elbows and knees

Noises coming from every direction

Chattering teeth

And painful erections

Lashes of fire

Across the back

While creatures of the damned

Have you as a snack

Pulling off your skin

And ripping out your eye

Wishing every second

That you could just die

Blood oozing out

Along with puss

This is the fate of many of us

There will not be an escape

Once you arrive

The first thing is thirst

As you are water deprived

The heat so intense it will boil your snot

And you will hate to breathe

In the air that's so hot

So keep up your wickedness

And wait your turn

There is enough fire in hell

For all to burn

Everything I do, I do with passion. Come join me and see what I can do with words!

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The following comments are for "HELL"
by DBurke

lava maggots/painful ERECTIONS
You had me at lava maggots but painful erections?!! It's about time I come across a poem that combined those two words and all within a vision of hell. What description of such a terrible realm is complete without mentioning PAINFUL ERECTIONS? This is a truly well thought out piece. Thank you. Superbery indeedery. Now please stop scaring me.

( Posted by: thetesticularprancer [Member] On: June 4, 2010 )

Yikes - Dante contemporized! My Lady You Rock! Another good one!

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: June 4, 2010 )

Very thoughtful and insightful. Excellent

( Posted by: R.K.Singh [Member] On: June 7, 2010 )

Hell Fire
This reminds me of a book I once got from a Budhist Temple in Malaysia, I think it was called something like 'Trips into the Underworld. I threw the book away as it got boring and had no pasion or feeling to it and was almost a documentary.

What a sriking diference in your description in poetry, I am sure the Budhist Monks in the temple would have been far more successful in warning people of their wicked ways had they had your words to share!



( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: June 7, 2010 )

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