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Craving solitude she dreamt
Far off on the beaten trail.
Onward through the pounding rain
Amidst the weary wind's wild wail.

Unencumbered by the lightning flash,
And the trees all bending down.
The sky alight with unearthly glow.
The night air alive with sound.

Then quietly falls the summer rain
Like gentle tears running down my pain.
My heart knows I'll see you again
In my dreams of gentle rain.



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The following comments are for "DREAMS OF RAIN"
by Serbits

the trees all bending down.
Poem does have a dream-like quality. Running down my pain seems a bit strained though, as if it was forced to fit the poem for rhyme's sake.

What is the protagonist craving solitude from?

( Posted by: toscano [Member] On: May 20, 2010 )

Toscano
Dreams of Rain
I wrote this poem at our cottage. It stormed alot that summer (the trees were all bending down in the wind - it was wicked). I was quite sad, and the rain was like my pain. Fit my mood.

I was craving solitude from everyone and everything. Our cottage is a haven I can go away and hide.

( Posted by: Serbits [Member] On: May 20, 2010 )

Dreams of rain
This one felt good like being washed in rain. Great imagery and wonderful word choices! Cool!

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: May 22, 2010 )





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