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The Christian women with their moustaches
To my right
Discuss in earnest tones the horrors of rapture
And the thousand year party to follow.
They smile at the thought
Of their enemies suffering.

Minutes earlier
They had refused to let a woman and her small child
Sit at that table.

They saw it first.

They saw it first;
It's their table.


Good luck.

Now they give thanks for God's grace
And mercy
And love.

Everything begins with lucid indifference.
(Albert Camus)

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The following comments are for "The Christian Women with their Moustaches"
by Manatee

the horrors of rapture
Reminds of an incident during the showing of a Christian movie in '97 - when I lived in Monterey Bay. Halfway through the movie a middle aged man walked in talking to himself. Not loud, mind. The group leaders quickly ushered him out because, in my opinion, he was keeping us from hearing a very important message that would save our eternal souls. Never mind the movie was fictional.

After seeing him off, they returned to the darkened theater and dusted their hands happily as if they'd done the Lord's work in turning away an undesirable who probably wasn't "all there" to begin with. The incident annoyed me enough that I got up and left, purposely leaving the doors open to allow real light into the darkened room.

What was I doing in a theater showing a Christian movie? Boredom. Curiosity. Avoiding looking for work. Cheap tickets.

I liked the "saw it first" line. It illustrates the childish behavior sometimes adopted by women with mustaches. Ah, to live with blinders on...

( Posted by: toscano [Member] On: May 11, 2010 )

Christian women
Corinth or here - it is unfortunate and still true! Chances are when the tickets to the rapture are handed out they won't get one - and they can then entertain themselves by clucking and fussing about those evil others that were taken up!

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: May 12, 2010 )

I'm curious about why you gave this a six. Not saying you were wrong to do so, just wondering what the reasons were. Please explain!

( Posted by: Manatee [Member] On: May 26, 2010 )

I didn't like it. It weren't nuthin' personal or nuthin'. I get what you're saying but I was just a little disappointed. I like a bigger payoff. Like: "Then they got hit by a car" or "Then they became cannibles". Just me personally. I'm not saying it ain't cool the way it is. Some people like reggae and some like death metal. I like to ruffle feathers so I can get honest critiques myself. I want you to feel free to eviscerate me when I stink because I feel a creative spark sparking. I chose you. We are forever linked. BEWARE. Please know I don't sleep much. I hear that makes people nuts. Then it kills them. I'm often so facetious that it doesn't even make any damn sense.
Pleased to meet ya'!

( Posted by: thetesticularprancer [Member] On: May 27, 2010 )

I knew it. Months ago a psychic told me that the House of Manatee would find itself allied with prancing testicles. I had no idea what she meant. But now . . . now it's all coming together.

( Posted by: manatee [Member] On: May 27, 2010 )

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