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"Hi my true age is 12 years old".

"This is a story about a boy and his robot".

"The robots In this world are called Roboto in this story".

"I make my own Story".

Main Characters:
Inky: the main chracter
Sayonara: it is Inky mum
Kaiba: Inky dad
Bibo: Inky little brother
Nomi: a clever and wise scientist.

Place: Inky live up the mountains he go to school 8:30 everyday

"Now lets begin".
This Episode is called "First Day Of Being A Roboto Trainer".

( At Inky House)

"The scene starts in the bedroom".

Sayonara: wake up! time to pick your first roboto, Inky hurry or you be late, professor Nomi is waiting for you.

Inky: aggg! Hmm well today it is... lets see what time it is hmm aggg!!! oh gosh it is 9:00am already.

Sayonara: Hmmm seems like last night party was a bit too late for you.

Inky: guess so huh.

Bibo: come on you little lazy head.
time for breakfast.

Inky: Stop yelling already.

Kaiba: Hey kids, am watching the television.

Bibo: stop acting tough or else...
...i'll tell your little secrats huh.

Inky: you wish.


Sayonara: better wash your faces...
and hurry to eat your breakfast...

( Breakfast Table)

Inky: i bet we are going to have rice with stir fries again.

Bibo: nope we have not, look!

Inky: wow! is that...

Sayonara: yes...this is a dragon eggs from mount Horunish they say it is so tasty i bought two eggs for $37
It is quite cheap for it down the market, but most of the place cost around $100.

Inky: thanks mum you're the best.

(Walking to professorNomi laboratory)

Inky: well atleast am not late, only 2 miles till i reach the lab. wonder how many robot there to chose. mum said they are 6 Roboto to chose, but you only allowed to pick one hmmm...

( Look like are littlehero thinking)

"see you soon at the second episode".



The following comments are for "Medarakuchu part 1 First Day Of being A Roboto Trainer"
by Lava inferno

Not the worst
I had actually considered using that style for when my characters talk, but I'd suggest using quotation marks; that way you can add little personality outside their words; as an example

'Inky: "Give me some space mom, Bibo's the one who ruined your dress!" Even while he explains it with a touch of perfect innocence he sweats in case she realizes who really runined the shirt.'

With time your work could become quite good, just don't be afriad to have something cool happen even if it hurts the main characters'.

( Posted by: Ragath [Member] On: June 1, 2003 )

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