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In the eyes of those I pass, gazing bitterly
An intruder I feel, tight in my own skin
Contempt for a soul, whose only sin
Is doing what Iím told
****
Boorishly I speak, with an accent
Harsh in the ear and displeasing
Calling attention to my misplacement
Apparently
****
What can a man do against such reckless hate?
No offense have I given but the place of my birth
What canít be helped must be endured
Not here
****
Not time to read the book and
The cover holds no interest
For those unwilling to bend
Pity
****
Shameful of my speech in public
Whispered thought and cock-eyed looks
Understanding without admission
The meaning lost
****
They hide behind a mask of ignorance
Trying to make me feel unwelcome
My shoes unfit to tread their streets
Unwilling to walk a mile


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'But I don't want to go among mad people,' said Alice. 'Oh, you can't help that,' said the cat. 'We're all mad here.'
Lewis Carroll



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The following comments are for "Misplacement"
by HeRoCoMpLeX

Misplacement
Love the homage to 'The Lord Of The Rings' I would like to know the genesis of this poem. Strong word choices and imagery. Liked it!

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: April 17, 2010 )

Dave....
I'm probably way off base here, but I assumed you were describing yourself as a soldier in an unwelcoming land...in any case...very well done Dave!

Bea

( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: April 17, 2010 )

@Ken and Bea
Ken,

I read the "Lord of the Rings" on two different occasions but if I've paid homage to those books here it was not intentional. I'm curious what you are referring too. Itís been a while since my last reading of that series all be it one of my favorites.

Bea,

Actually I was writing about my time here in Germany, not Iraq. You would be surprised how intolerant the Germans are of Americans and the way they stare while I am at a restaurant talking with friends or family. I wrote most of this poem on a napkin at a restaurant downtown while my wife and I were eating there. We were out shopping for baby stuff about a month before the birth of our daughter. We were talking and laughing and enjoying ourselves, but not in a loud or rude manner and yet at one point or another I caught disgusted looks from every table around us. It saddens me...

Dave

( Posted by: HeRoCoMpLeX [Member] On: April 18, 2010 )

C'est la vie Dave!
What do you expect Dave, from a country that was disgraced before the world. Especially toward the country that defeated them and brought freedom to the rest of the world...some of whom I'm sorry to say...still resent us.

C'est la vie I guess!

Bea

( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: April 18, 2010 )

What can a man do against such reckless hate?
Ha ha. I also recognized the LOTR line. I'm such a nerd.

Interesting that you write of yourself as boorish and harsh when the German language has itself been described as that. It's such a guttural tongue.

But one I'd be interested in learning.

The way I see it is sometimes people can pick up on discomfort - which in turn makes them uncomfortable. Perhaps being comfortable in your own skin, regardless of location, might make a world of difference.

As for poem, I think deleting a word here and there would help with flow. It may lose some of the train of thought feel of it or it might not. It's all about which direction you take it in.

( Posted by: toscano [Member] On: April 18, 2010 )

@Toscano and Jonpenny
Gentleman,

When I commented to Ken that I didn't realize I had given a nod to Lord of the Rings, I was going off of memory because I was too f*#king lazy to scroll and actually look at what I had written. After toscano's comment, I finally took the half a second and re-read the poem and sure enough, "What can men do against such reckless hate," smacked me right in the forehead. That line popped into my head whole during the writing of this and right off I realized that Theodan (sp?) said it just before riding out with Aragorn in the movie. In my humble opinion if fit well and so I used it.

All that to say, yes, I did indeed nod to LOTR in this piece. Next time, I'll be more observant. Thank you both for your insightful comments!

Dave

( Posted by: HeRoCoMpLeX [Member] On: April 19, 2010 )





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