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The Ploy
..........(Revenge of a Mad Cow)
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The maid declared
“Thinner is saved”
The boy collapsed
on the plate
The dying room
shivered with greed
sucking the fumes
before the bleed

would blend with clinching sounds of grinding joy

despite how mum would feel about this boy
despite how cows may feel about the ploy

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Mum asked a guest
to join the feast
yet another pest
feed on the beast
but in his mouth
there were no teeth
but one that hang
amidst the heath

of hunger he would not fail to deploy

despite how mum would feel about this boy
despite how cows may feel about the ploy

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.

The maids would squeeze
in diving suits
in yellow seas
of juicy fruits
the submarine
of times gone by
a sunken scene
now hollow and dry

treacherous souls would fill the horse of troy

despite how mum would feel about the boy
despite how cows may feel about the ploy

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another cow
a silver horn
that stabbed the child
as pain was born
the blood turned white
and as it flowed
the baby cried
from getting cold

a bottle-like flesh would hang from mum’s old shirt

now she would no longer need to flirt
now she understands the taste of hurt

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will she understand about the boy?
the way how cows may feel about the ploy

the way how cows may feel about the ploy
the way how cows may feel about the ploy

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The following comments are for "The Ploy"
by waelnawara

The Ploy
I'm not sure about this one. I mean, it sounds like it would fit well to music. It has all of the elements of a great song in my humble opinion. I'm just not sure I get what you’re trying to say. In all honesty, the song makes very little sense to me. I can't see through your metaphor.

Perhaps I'm just slow today. It happens a lot. I would love to know the story behind this one though. Either way, thanks for sharing with us!

Much Love,

Dave

( Posted by: HeRoCoMpLeX [Member] On: April 19, 2010 )

making sense
Thanks a lot Dave, for your comments and critique.

I am not sure that I have a completely good answer to your question. Is this really about animals taking revenge from humans who in their greed, went far beyond the barbed wires of the circle of life?

Or is it even more sinister, a kind of a nightmarish bad karma that haunts us? I couldn't tell. I am just the writer. But you are the reader.

You know best and I trust your judgment. It happens and the writer must hopefully learn from it.

:)
Best,
Wael

( Posted by: waelnawara [Member] On: April 20, 2010 )





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