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A year has come,
A year has gone,
and i am still the
same, if only slightly
Demented.

My head is chaos,
my body feels in tatters,
and no one seems to care.

I knock on wood,
I cross myself,
According to my faith.

Thank the spirits,
i am still alive
so that i might, with all my
Heart,
fulfill my life's ambition.

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if the pen is mighter then the sword then the word processer must be mighter then the missile


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The following comments are for "another year, still here"
by johntellall

Still here
Another year indeed!

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: April 7, 2010 )

I am still the same
I've always hated making suggestions but you may want to consider changing slightly to more. As is, you are telling the reader you haven't changed in the last year - which stands in contrast to what you are trying to get across.

Not that your demented, of course.

( Posted by: toscano [Member] On: April 18, 2010 )





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