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they wouldnt have a clue
weather jesus was
me or you

they say in the clouds
they say this
very loud

i read the book they all go by
i see the no essence
in their lies

within this book
a little trick a little hook
and if your snaged

dont be afraid

The creator Knows
the the lies they made...

the same they speak
that makes them week

that makes them sway
from side to side

believing in
The great white lie



------
poetricky


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The following comments are for "The great white lie ~Happy easter"
by Zeus

Easter greetings ... ?
Apart from the simple spelling errors which are always a puzzlement to me ... who uses spell check even when I'm leaving comments ... this poem gives me much to think about.

I'll offer my suggestions on where corrections are needed.

weather jesus was - should be whether
and if your snaged - snagged
that makes them week - weak

Now for the other oddity - you don't use any capitals other than
Know - which gives me thoughts on the reason why you decided to do so. Was it simply a mistake in hitting the shift key?

You also don't use any punctuation other than the two trailing off periods which made me avoid adding other correction suggestions regarding apostrophes ..

My compliments on your final line which had enough flair to register,
Happy Easter .. I think


( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: April 24, 2011 )

spell checker
Thank you for the input yes I agree I need to slow down and spell checker is my only hope and your input Thank you

( Posted by: Zeus [Member] On: June 4, 2016 )





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