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This summer is older than last summer.
This summer has white in its hair
and a beard gone dry and wiry.
Napping.

Spring was younger than ever.
Juicy.
Falling all over herself to make mistakes.
Barefoot on wet pavement.
Asleep on the front porch.
Inventing drama with her roommates.

We don't know yet about fall.
And we never speak of winter.

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I blog irregularly at TinkerX. I'm also on Twitter. @andyhavens, go figure.


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The following comments are for "Half Circles"
by andyhavens

casual observances
While I'm sure this wasn't an easy write it comes across effortlessly ... shows - IMO - finesse.

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: March 27, 2010 )

Circles

Andy,

I don't know what to say. As soon as I got done reading I knew I had to comment but I've got now words for what I was feeling. The imagery you've created here is amazing. Brilliant description!

The second stanza stands out particularly for me. The "barefoot on wet pavement" line was just delicious.

Wonderful work!

Dave

( Posted by: HeRoCoMpleX [Member] On: March 28, 2010 )

NIce!
Just terrific. I loved this one! And having spent too many of my younger years in snow - I live in California - I don't speak of winter much!

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: March 28, 2010 )

Inventing drama
Awesome. Love how, in such few words, you give the seasons proper personalities.

( Posted by: toscano [Member] On: June 2, 2010 )

Good one Andy!
Just another Andy Havens Gem.

Kudo's for this one!

Bea

( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: June 2, 2010 )





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