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For Mary, whose rare and wondrous love I lost:


In bay laurel, pine
and eucalyptus
my love lives where
morning mist is
dreams I have of her.



------
johnlovejr at hotmail dot com


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by Flonigus

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Flonigus,

I very nice expression of a lost love.

Indeed time will heal the love pain.

Remember that the caged bird must sing.

We all need space to grow deeper in our wisdom.

Love shall not close her door on this love opportunities, but do not take each other for granted

When you catch a butterfly, you must have the courage and love to let it and maybe it will return to your hands

Suggestions for your poem titled are the following: Mourning Mist or Dreams I Shall Have


firefly747

( Posted by: FireFly747 [Member] On: July 4, 2010 )

Thank you FireFly747
I'm still feeling the pain from this break-up.

Thank you for your comments and rating.

( Posted by: Flonigus [Member] On: July 5, 2010 )

Meditative
What I really like about this, besides the koan-like clarity, is the ambiguity. A forest, or a collection of scents? 'My love lives where morning mist is dreams' or 'where morning mist is. Dreams I have of her.'? The poem works all ways up.

( Posted by: MobiusSoul [Member] On: August 27, 2010 )

Thanks to MobiusSoul
MobiusSoul,

Thank you for your appreciation of this poem, and for commenting.

So you know: When we split, Mary moved up into the Oakland hills amongst the trees (and scents) mentioned here. It is often misty or foggy up there; more so than down closer to the bay, where we had lived together for over seven years.

Still missing her.

( Posted by: Flonigus [Member] On: August 28, 2010 )

Flonigus
After reading this three times,including comments, I find myself missing Mary, too!

Perhaps you'll write another poem on the "wherebouts of Mary"....and then Fireflys suggestion, "Dreams I Shall Have" may well become reality...

Glad I saw this....thank you....

( Posted by: JetfireK [Member] On: February 4, 2011 )

thanks
Thank you for your attention to this piece, and for your comment.

I still miss Mary every day.

( Posted by: Flonigus [Member] On: February 5, 2011 )

Eucalyptus Flonigus
excellent free-thinking use of words, and placing them to rhyme, and not the other way around. Solves so many poets' conundrums.

( Posted by: VickieSALT [Member] On: April 15, 2011 )





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