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In The Dark Again

She's laying alone thinking about sinking
into a dream.

Thank God for the dark
where she can park her troubles
and focus on scenes in a dream.

Chorus:
She's laying alone thinking about sinking
into a dream.

In the dark her hair isn't grey
she knows what to say
and there's no debts to pay.

Chorus:

In the dark on moonlit cruises
she can eat as she chooses
and there's no mottled bruises.

Chorus

In the dark she listens to ghosts
that hum hymns at their posts
and are clement hosts.

Chorus

In the dark she loves being home
because she's free to roam
with no complex syndrome.

Chorus

In the dark she doesn't weep
herself into deep sleep
and seek castles to keep.

Chorus


Author's Note:
This was fun!


------
"Tigers bloom where there's oodles of room." Zodiac Zoo


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The following comments are for "March Song Challenge"
by Pen

Pen's Challenge song
And fun to read!! The 'every line rhyme' is kinda cool but I had some trouble with the syllabic beat counts from verse to verse, although I could see that if you sang it with a few rushed lines and the shorter lines allow for beat rests it would work pretty well. I sat with my guitar and couldn't help but sing it bouncy and bright in spite of the darker context - but that is the pesky happy mood I'm in. Maybe tonight I'll be in a funkier mode and can give it a more somber sound. Great fun! Thanks.

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: March 2, 2010 )

Pen's challenge
Hey Pen...thanks for getting your feet wet in the song writing challenge.

It's a long way from a sestina or a sonnet or free verse, but it IS fun, insn't it!

Love ya,
Bea

( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: March 2, 2010 )

jonpenny & Bea
Glad you enjoyed it and I can see how it could be a bit awkward but it was written off the cuff because a phrase had been doing circles in my head when the challenge was posted so I simply ran with it. Thanks for this and thanks to you both for commenting.

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: March 3, 2010 )

In the dark she listens to ghosts
I like that line. Makes me wonder what our favorite Irishman would make of it.

The quick verse chorus verse structure makes me think of this as a pop song. Hey, maybe you should submit it to American Idol.

( Posted by: toscano [Member] On: April 18, 2010 )





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