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His arms flexed

His breastplate tensed up

Veins popped out and disappeared

Sweat fell from his brow

He made faces a woman could lust for

As he pushed up and down



No more teasing that little wimp

Puny little joke of a man

Slinky, skinny, sorrowful dude

Laugh at the little person

Who got punked every minute on the hour

Couldn’t even save his girlfriend from rape



The thoughts increased his drive

I'm not so small now am I?

I'm not a little punk now am I?

IM NOT THE GUY TO TRY ANYMORE

He screamed out as he pushed up and down

Iron backing down to the man's power



CLANK

He sets his weights

Sat up and grabbed his towel

His body swollen, ripped, Masculine, and delectable

Especially to the woman spectators

Squeezing their thighs together drooling





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The following comments are for "SIZZLE"
by DBurke

Great!
I have read several examples of your work and they are always intense. Great work.

( Posted by: speed_addiction [Member] On: March 2, 2010 )

Sizzel
When I was a kid there was always an ad in comic books about a skinny guy on the beach and some giant muscle bound guy kicking sand in his face and having the 'How is she innocent' bathing beauty picking the muscles (Perhaps over brains) and walking away. There isn't a man of my age that doesn't have that image, or the fear of his own inability to protect his woman from rouge males, as represented in the comic ad..What also floats around in his head is an indictment on the shallowness of women. If muscles and money is the only inducement and those women with clenched thighs are not as buxom and blond as the ad would express - then most of us are in trouble.
Provocative - well written and on a lot of levels disturbing!

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: March 2, 2010 )





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