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Looking close at the snow globe

She appears just as I see her when

She dance in my head

Like a ballerina in a snow globe

Never getting tired

Beauty without cliché expressions

Snow falling around her

Representing tear Confetti

Never getting cold

Never feeling hunger

Never hurting

Never tiring from her dance

A dance of the heavens

And many homecoming celebrations

She is a beautiful memory

A princess of the worlds

God smiles at my visions

Of my snow globe princess



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The following comments are for "SNOW GLOBE PRINCESS"
by DBurke

Snow Globe
Sweet, but not a favorite. Although the simplicity is inviting. A few nitpicky tense issue things: 3v 'danced'6v 'cliched' Thanks

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: March 2, 2010 )





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