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There was a piece of the sea
Where your dreams lay,
and I see your eyes were once Worlds
Transmuted and Condensced
through the eons...

Do they haunt you,
the Ghosts of these forgotten Worlds?


In the piece of the sea,
Where your dreams lay,
They came alive just to recall
all of the Ways that men may fall...

Do you heed their Wisdom,
these most sacred Ghosts of distant past?




formidable eyes transpire higher allocated message of Ghosts incognita, seaward inclinations and tides ebb; sweep dreams in pieces toward distant Worlds again


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The following comments are for ""Matter can be broken down but never destroyed""
by ghostpoisonsturgeon

Transmuted and Condensed
Reads like hypnagogic hallucinations: Something beautiful and brief and then longed for.

I see you're still up to your sleight-of-hand wordplay.

( Posted by: toscano [Member] On: March 1, 2010 )

Matter
I liked this one - transcendent, a poetic landscape that is made somehow attainable.The feel of it stays long after the read. I think one of my favorites of yours!

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: March 2, 2010 )





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